In Week 6 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great explanations.

We wrote about the Moon’s different phases as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a great explanation will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time. Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

WHY DO YOU THINK THE MOON CHANGES ITS SHAPE?

Introduction:

Have you ever wondered why the Moon changes its appearance when it is a dark night when it is time for you to sleep? Well some people think it changes its appearance but it is actually orbiting Earth and while the Moon is orbiting us also Earth is orbiting (going around) The Sun.

People think that the moon is changing shape but it is actually the Moon's appearance because the Moon orbits Earth while Earth orbits the sun. In addition the Moon orbits on its axis like Earth but we orbit anti-clockwise. The moon can possible be on full Moon but it actually orbiting Earth like I said. Even Though the Moon you always see is actually its appearance.

There are lunar phases of the Moon actually there are 8 lunar phases that are called New Moon, Waxing Crescent, First Quarter, Waxing Gibbous, Full Moon, Waning Gibbous, Last Quarter and Waning Crescent. Those lunar phases is actually the Moon that orbits us and those Moons actually happen at night when it is sleep time. These are the lunar phases that

Now you know some facts about how does the Moon changes its appearance here is a site for you to look why else does the Moon changes its appearance  if you are reading this I hope you enjoyed it because if those facts are not enough for you like I said here is the link for you to see more facts about why does the Moon changes its appearance.

(This is the link for more facts about why does the Moon changes its appearance.)

My Explanation Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading: WHY DO YOU THINK THE MOON CHANGES ITS SHAPE?
is the question WHY DOES THE MOON LOOK DIFFERENT EVERY NIGHT?	YES	YES
My opening paragraph/introduction: Lunar Phases	YES
introduce what my writing is about in a clear way	YES
hooks the reader	YES
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	YES
2-3 sentences maximum	YES
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
give detailed information (factual descriptions)
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
connectives and time connectives
descriptive language
formal language
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found
write an interesting fact

2015 Term 2 week 5 the hot red firing ball Mars.

In Week 5 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great information reports. We wrote about the planet Mars as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a great information report will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time. Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

Introduction

Already in five seconds you’ll be taken on a journey facts about Mars. Also these facts about Mars are really interesting because if you have been dreaming about looking at facts about Mars you are looking in the right place.

The Orbit of Mars

Even though Mars is our closest neighbour, its orbit is very different. A Martian day (or how long it takes to rotate once on its axis) is longer than an Earth day and equals 24 hours and 37 minutes. This is because it spins slower than our planet. Moreover, a year on Mars is the same as 687 Earth days! Imagine if you lived on Mars, you would be almost half the age you were on Earth! I am 10 years old and I would be ⅚ if I was in Mars.

Appearance

Mars has red dusty lumpy rocks shaped like a potato. WARNING! watch out dust storm’s are ahead of you remember they destroy everything in their path. Mars is a planet but though there is no H2O. Obvious no humans can ever live there.

Mars is our neighbor so it is the fourth planet from the sun. Do you wonder how old you will be when your age is in earth how old do you think you will be? Though Mars is a planet 2 USA people went to Mars to see was going on wrong when they thought something happened.

Conclusion

Now you have learned so much things if that is not enough well then travel to Mars by clicking on this site down here.

http://www.kidsastronomy.com/mars.htm

(Shared writing with teacher and group 19/05/15)

14/05/15

My Reflection: (e.g. what I learnt, what I thought about my work, what helped me improve)...

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My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)
My opening paragraph:
says what my report is about in a clear way
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
outlines the main features of the subject
My main paragraphs:
have sub-headings where helpful
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
give detailed information (factual descriptions)
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found

This is my ARB: Missed opportunities

I hope you enjoy reading it.